Here is my entry for the Eisteddfod Prose competition. I have been working on this screenplay for years now. I am ready to get some feedback and see what others think. I only posted the first few pages of the screenplay. If this catches your attention, please follow the link to read the entire adventure.
This story takes place in a fictionary world much like our own where angels and demons are silently fighting a war in the underbelly of a city known as St. Eyria: City of Darkness. I hope you enjoy.
ST. EYRIA: CITY OF DARKNESS
SEQ. 1: EXT. ST. EYRIA SKYLINE / NIGHT
It is dark. We hover over the city, looking down at the amazing - almost surreal - skyline. We circle in a birdlike arc around the city, slowly winding down into...
SEQ. 2: EXT. CITY STREETS / NIGHT
Our focus comes to rest on a beautiful young woman running frantically down the street. She gasps as an arrow flies past. Her eyes seem to literally flash for only a second. And she steals a quick glance back.
We leave the girl and look behind her. A group of four people are chasing her. They are dressed in black, wearing leather jackets emblazoned with white skulls. And under each of their right eyes is a small tattoo of a skull. Their mark. They are THE SKULL. They each carry crossbows and sheathed swords. We focus briefly on the grim expression of a beautiful girl. She is JULIE HARRIS. Ahead of her is a fit looking man - only slightly older than the rest. He speaks into a headset.
The subject is in view, sir.
SEQ. 3: EXT. NEIGHBORING STREET / NIGHT
A similar group of The Skull heads down the street. In the lead is a tall and powerful looking man with a bow and arrow. He is LAYTHAN, and he does not dress like the others. He also speaks into a headset.
Try to corner her. I'm on my way.
And they quicken the pace.
SEQ. 4: EXT. CITY STREETS / NIGHT
The original group of The Skull continues running down the street. Ahead we see the frightened girl round the corner. The Skull members run to catch up, but as they round the corner into...
SEQ. 5: EXT. ALLEY / NIGHT
We see that she is gone. They slow down and look around.
Where the hell did she go?
The others continue to look around in confusion.
SEQ. 6: EXT. NEIGHBORING STREET / NIGHT
Laythan and his followers continue. Laythan looks concerned.
What's going on? Talk to me.
We lost her sir.
SEQ. 7: EXT. ALLEY / NIGHT
The first team continues looking around in confusion. The leader walks a bit ahead.
Suddenly the girl lunges from the shadows - eyes glowing white - and tares into the leader with a long dagger.
Everybody freezes up for an instant. Except Julie. She steps forward and kicks the girl in the head. She then shoots her crossbow, but the girl catches the arrow and tosses it aside. In the same swift motion she knocks the crossbow away, smashing it into the wall. Julie punches her in the face and pulls out her sword. The girl takes a step back as Julie slashes her stomach. The girl roars in pain, then lunges at Julie. Julie kicks her hard in the stomach, but to no avail. They struggle over the sword, and within seconds it falls to the ground. Julie punches the girl in the face, then sweeps her feet out from under her. She falls, but jumps back up.
There is a brief pause. Julie drops into a split. Within less than a second the girl transforms from a look of confusion too belated understanding as an arrow penetrates her heart.
Across the alley Laythan watches, still holding his now empty bow in readiness.
The girl staggers back. Julie grabs the sword and stands. Steps forward. And shoves the arrow deeper into the girl's chest. She screams in pain and falls to her knees. Her eyes no longer glow. The frightened girl looks up at Julie. But Julie is expressionless. She runs the girl through with the sword.
Julie begins kicking the body. Again and again. Becoming more and more violent. And then she raises her sword.
A hand on her shoulder stops her. She turns to look at Laythan.
Easy. I think she's dead.
Julie lowers the sword and exhales.
He spits on the girl’s body.
Give my regards to God.
Laythan turns to walk away. But he stops and turns to Julie.
What is your name?
Laythan smiles and walks away.
SEQ. 8: EXT. CHRISTIAN'S MOM'S HOME / NIGHT
It is just after sundown. A raggedy figure walks down the rows of lower class houses. He is CHRISTIAN, and upon seeing his face we realize he is a handsome young man in his early twenties in desperate need of a shave. He does not look healthy. Christian heads towards a run down looking house. Through the window we see the lights are still on and a woman in her early fifties - CHRISTIAN'S MOM - is watching the news.
SEQ. 9: INT. CHRISTIAN'S MOM'S HOUSE / NIGHT
Christian's mom sits and watches the news in the obviously poor - though well kept - living room. On the screen a woman stares directly into the camera and speaks soberly. She is ANGELINE WALCOTT.
While police claim to be cracking down on drug
trafficking, they seem to be helpless against the
influx of the new drug Redemption in St. Eyria.
Recent reports claim that approximately one
third of the city has taken this drug at least once
within the past month.
The door opens. Christian's mom rises and turns to see her son.
She seems concerned.
Christian. I didn't hear you come in.
There is a brief silence.
Are you okay?
You really don't look well.
I'm fine Mom.
I worry son. You're gone all day...
Where can you work looking like this?
He looks away.
Who the hell do you think pays the bills around
And you look like you haven't eaten in weeks... I
know about this new drug Redemption.
I'm not on drugs.
Ever since your father left...
That was five years ago.
She walks up to him and touches his face gently.
I know Christian. It was a long
time ago. That's why I worry.
He hugs her.
I'm fine Mom. I promise... Everything's going to
Over Christian's shoulder we see that the news is still on. We close in on the screen as Angeline continues to talk.
Many local businessmen – led by billionaire Mike
Curry – have been calling for reform and stronger
leadership in the face of such high criminal activity.
SEQ. 10: EXT. CITY STREETS / NIGHT
We pull back slightly to show that we are no longer in Christian's Mom's house. We are now watching one among several screens in an electronics store window.
As the following speech is given we speed quickly through the streets of St. Eyria, focusing briefly on scattered pieces of the bad side of life. Suicide. Drug use and sale. Robbery. Rape. Abuse. Fighting. Cult activity. And we occasionally stop at a TV screen to watch a little more of the report.
The crime rate has increased steadily every year
for the past twenty years. In St. Eyria, the gang
known as The Skull holds the city hostage while
it plunders our homes and our businesses. Violent
crimes such as rape and murder are at an all time
high, far above the national average.
SEQ. 11: INT. CONVENIENCE STORE / NIGHT
As Angeline finishes her speech we pull away from one last screen inside of a convenience store. Three gang punks stand before the counter holding hand guns. Two point their guns at the man behind the counter. The third holds his gun limply. He is DANNY MICHAELS. We focus on his face as the other two open fire. He cringes, almost unnoticeably. We travel over his shoulder and out into...
SEQ. 12: EXT. CITY STREET / NIGHT
Outside of the convenience store - directly under the streetlight - stand two grungy looking Skulls along with one elite Skull. The elite Skull and one of the punks look at the third, who seems nervous. He is JIM.
Where's the money Jim?
I... I don't have it.
Then where's the stuff?
I... It's gone.
Gone? What the..?
The elite Skull stops the Skull – over zealous and pissed at this insubordination - from jumping Jim.
Jim... You know the penalty for a Skull taking
No... No. I didn't... I lost it...
You... Lost it...
Yeah... I swear I didn't... I wouldn't...
You're tainted Jim. That's no good. You don't
deserve to be a part of us.
The Skull starts to pull a gun, but Jim pushes him down and takes off down the street.
The Skull stands and they chase after him. Jim takes a quick turn and they follow him into an...
SEQ. 13: EXT. ALLEY / NIGHT
Jim no longer has much of a lead.
Please... Oh please...
Suddenly something grabs the Skull and pulls him into the shadows. A flash of eyes, and we can hear someone getting the crap kicked out of him.
The Elite Skull grabs Jim's jacket, but Jim keeps going. The jacket rips and small vials of Redemption go flying.
Another figure grabs the Elite Skull, who falls. He grabs Jim's ankle and trips him as he disappears into the shadows. A flash of eyes, and we can hear someone getting the crap kicked out of him.
Jim gets up and turns around. The alley is silent, and he is alone. He drops to his hands and knees and begins picking up the vials of Redemption. He stops nervously and looks around. Still alone. He stands. Turns around. Right in front of him is a tall man. Middle aged. Long, and slightly receded hair. He looks regal and powerful. He is KOREN. A girl appears to his left holding a metal staff. She is ALEXIS. A young man appears to Koren's right. He has dark purple hair spiked half a foot in the air, and he holsters two daggers inside of his jacket. He is RAPHAEL. Koren takes a step forward, stepping on a vial of Redemption.
Jim pisses his pants.
Or the Skull will be the least of your worries.
And they are gone. Jim begins to shake. He nervously unscrews a vial of Redemption and reaches into the liquid. He pulls out a communion wafer and places it in his mouth. A look of total ecstasy washes over his face, and he drops to his knees.
SEQ. 14: EXT. HAVEN / NIGHT
Still dark. A gothic looking cathedral. We can sense there is no longer anything holy about this place. A steady flow of people are going inside.
SEQ. 15: INT. HAVEN / NIGHT
The cathedral is now a night club. And it is packed. A DJ spins trance and hypnotic music mixing rock and electronica. The people are of a wide variety, and we roam the room - seemingly aimless - as we encounter them. We arrive at the bar, where many drinks are served. We eventually come to a beautiful red head in her mid-thirties, wearing a business like - though quite sexy – dress standing near the bar. She is LUNA. And she turns to look directly into the camera. We pull back to show that she is actually looking at Koren, Alexis and Raphael.
Sorry Luna. Koren had this silly idea that we
should save a human life.
SEQ. 16: INT. HALLWAY / NIGHT
Luna leads Koren, Alexis and Raphael through a hallway until they reach…
SEQ. 17: INT. OFFICE / NIGHT
It was obviously once used for more Biblical purposes. Religious books still line the many bookcases. As do many great works of literature from around the world. But mostly there are books of history. Most old. But there is a computer. Aside from that, everything looks like it should be in a museum. Luna, Koren, Alexis and Raphael stand.
Koren... Did you find out where this stuff is coming
You know where it's coming from.
You know what I mean.
No Luna. We...
Luna's eyes glow as she tries to control her anger.
How hard is this? You may possibly be the only
three inhabitants of St. Eyria that can't find
Only the more... Elite... Of the Skull know where
they process it. And they are well trained against
our… Interrogation techniques. They will not
tell us what we want to know.
And what do they tell you?
Help. Help. Not in the face.
Alexis giggles. Luna gets in Raphael's face, enraged.
Raphael? Alexis? You think this is funny?
These people are hunting us.
And that's the least of my worries. Now, we have a
job to do. And if we don't do it almost every soul on
the planet could be lost. That may not mean anything
to the three of you... But I take that responsibility
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