What Use Am I?

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What Use Am I?

Postby meicalabawen » 20 Oct 2010, 03:01

What Use Am I?
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What use my hands
when I cannot use them
to carry you?

What use my eyes
when I cannot see
your path?

What use my years
when I cannot ease
your mind?

I ache to hold you,
I cry to see you
cry.
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Re: What Use Am I?

Postby Ainevar » 13 Nov 2010, 14:57

Sounds like how I felt some of the times a friend of mine got real depressed. I love the poem. :tiphat:
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Re: What Use Am I?

Postby Daryvas » 04 Dec 2010, 04:54

Honest and raw. You convey the feeling of powerlessness well. I can remember times when I have felt those lines... Thank you for sharing.
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Re: What Use Am I?

Postby wyeuro » 05 Dec 2010, 01:48

a very effective expression of futility and despair. well built.
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