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Please read and comment on what emotions thought this brings

Postby cat » 06 Dec 2010, 11:05

Have a read of this.

I'd welcome any comments on what feelings this brings to mind.

Its quite poinant for me I'd just like to see if any one can pick up what i was driving at thanks cath

The Dragon within

The dragon within my mind
sometimes too easy to find
raises icy head
claws unfurl
wings beat
their wind hurl

Thoughts so black
fly like dragons
inspire me
don't harm me

Though these thoughts can harm
Their mystic power, I shall disarm
a better use to be had
For this dragon within my head

My dragon,
My dragons
Fly to me,
Inspire me

You are part of me
Your ice and fire
cools and warms me

Within me
you are me
I am you
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Re: Please read and comment on what emotions thought this br

Postby childofthewoods » 06 Dec 2010, 11:22

This is great!

For me the dragon would represent the dark thoughts that sometime creep into me......the sometimes brief depression that comes along every now and then.

I would be very interested to know about what you wrote it about. As it is a personal thing I think it could represent many things to many people - which is why I think it is awesome!
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Postby Heddwen » 06 Dec 2010, 11:28

Very enjoyable Cat :applause: It seems so appropriate with the darkening days before the Solstice, you seem to be integrating the darker self into your being, but I guess only you truly know the full meaning.
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Re: Please read and comment on what emotions thought this br

Postby cat » 06 Dec 2010, 12:01

Thanks yes i had a few things that came to mind when i read it.

I say this a it was another case of quick grab a pencil this morning as a line came to me and the rest just sort of flowed out.

Makes a change from having an attack of poetry whilst on the motorcycle :roll:
Some days i feel that a poem is just lurking there waiting to get out some times more like a insesent woodpecker hammering away till i get it down other times i just buzzs around like a lazy fly irritating me a bit. i like it though feels good to me.

I'll write about what it means to me later after a few more comments.......
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Re: Please read and comment on what emotions thought this br

Postby Argenta » 07 Dec 2010, 06:19

I didn't read the other replies, in order to give you my own idea of the poem, so forgive me if I repeat what people have already said.

For me, this felt very personal, it describes so accurately what I have often experienced -- a surge of highly destructive thoughts or emotions with which I have to wrestle so that they do not overwhelm me, and I put them instead to a creative use. Many of my stories and essays come from a high-strung state, often even bewilderment about what I should or should not do, and they help me "tame the dragon" (although I do not personally use this metaphor). I find that writing is an almost physical place where my mental energy can be applied so that instead of wreacking havoc, it produces something of a value, and helps me gain a broader insight.
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Re: Please read and comment on what emotions thought this br

Postby Argenta » 07 Dec 2010, 06:22

Heddwen wrote:Very enjoyable Cat :applause: It seems so appropriate with the darkening days before the Solstice, you seem to be integrating the darker self into your being

:idea: A very interesting parallel. I haven't thought about it that way but it sounds so natural.

Heddwen wrote:but I guess only you truly know the full meaning.

I wouldn't agree... I don't thing there is one ultimate meaning of any piece of art. Once that it is "out there" each person can give it his or her own full meaning. The meaning rests with the receiver, not (solely) with the creator.

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Postby Mountainheart » 07 Dec 2010, 11:15

Good stuff.. For me the Dragon is a strong streak of independence which sometimes tries to persuade me to walk away from close relationships. I have mainly tamed the dragon but sometimes its call is very strong...

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Re: Please read and comment on what emotions thought this br

Postby Heddwen » 07 Dec 2010, 14:28

Heddwen wrote:but I guess only you truly know the full meaning.

I wouldn't agree... I don't thing there is one ultimate meaning of any piece of art. Once that it is "out there" each person can give it his or her own full meaning. The meaning rests with the receiver, not (solely) with the creator.

Edited for spelling. Twice :oops: [/quote]

Point taken. Perhaps I should have said, 'you truly know what it means for you' I had assumed that it was a very personal piece of writing. :)
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Re: Please read and comment on what emotions thought this br

Postby cat » 07 Dec 2010, 15:50

It's personal to the reader same as beuty is in the eye of the beholder

So far what has been said ring true for me.

It'd good to see that its expressing simular feelings that i have experineced for others people.
That said it may only be people that feel a connection with this that are posting :shrug:

This poem is so far from my normal style its quite shocked me.

Thanks for the feedback and comments very useful.

I like my dragons
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Re: Please read and comment on what emotions thought this br

Postby Heddwen » 07 Dec 2010, 16:36

Well it's my favourite poem of yours

Re: "It's quite poignant for me. I'd like to see if anyone could pick up what I was driving at"

This is what I was attempting to explain.
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Re: Please read and comment on what emotions thought this br

Postby Aitrus » 09 Dec 2010, 01:26

As I read it I get a sense of the capacity for evil, of malevolence, that lurks within all of us. That capacity must be controlled before it destroys us and goes on to destroy those around us. After we control it we must accept it as part of ourselves, lest we become complacant or unwary and it gets loose to wreak havok.
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