Trapped

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Trapped

Postby Beorthwulf » 30 Mar 2011, 00:56

I feel trapped. As if stuck in a rut,
Aware it's high time to move.
I'm ready, I'd welcome a change. But!
From where I am there's much to loose.

I feel trapped. Not shut up in a box.
Neither penned in a literal sense,
No, there are no bars, no locks!
Nor is there some great, high fence.

I feel trapped. Not becasue I can't go.
More because I realise I've changed.
I need more from life, I see, I know!
My spirit feels heavy as if restrained

I feel trapped. Yet there is more you see,
Here my very being feels downcast.
The feeling I can't run, can't flee!
It's time to be true to myself at last.

I feel trapped. That's all there is to say.
I need to work out what comes next,
Find what will help me get underway!
But, as you can see I'm somewhat vexed...

I feel trapped...
Which was first, is it darkness, is it light?

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Re: Trapped

Postby Zylah » 30 Mar 2011, 08:27

I can definitely relate to the feeling you express here. Effective use of repetition in the first line of each stanza! It helps emphasize your point, like smacking up against different walls in a small room. Thanks for sharing :)
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Re: Trapped

Postby Beorthwulf » 30 Mar 2011, 22:39

Thankyou! I must admit i'm finding it hard to get the energy from my poems across in written form, i think it just needs reading out loud! Whens the next gathering?? :yay:
Which was first, is it darkness, is it light?

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