Cumulonimbus

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Cumulonimbus

Postby Hairy Woman » 08 Oct 2011, 17:00

Cumulonimbus
or
Ever

-- --

Rake-like fingers point accusingly at
The Ever-green.
Now early Autumn
gives their mantle greater majesty
And I look upon them.

Small.

Deep roots, rival of castles,
Like me they aspire -
Turn their gaze upward to:
the Ever-blue.

Follow bonfire smoke to
Where clouds roam
free of gait

Aloof.

What they covet most days
the firs deify
& through the gloom it gleams
Ever-brighter.

Ground-things
watch & dream for the experiences
they can never

Experience.

And against the backdrop
of midnight glitter
they worship
clouds
& wings.

--

I wrote spaces into the poem, but it's been stripped of all gaps. How do I fix this, and how do I centre the title and poem? A lot of the impact is lost as a result.

Capitalisation and use/non-use of ampersand is intentional; why, I do not know!

What do you think of the use of 'bonfire' and 'worship'? These are two words that stand out to me ('worship' was originally 'envy', but I thought it was too negative to end on for a poem supposed to be uplifting).
--Although I try to thoroughly check my work, hilarious and non-sensical typos may result in longer posts due to a shoddy laptop keyboard--

--Chase the numinous. --
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