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Cries through time

Postby Darach » 23 Oct 2011, 18:13

---Cries Through Time---

Through the veil of time ,I have heard myself cry.
Peering through the veil , I have seen myself die.
Wounds of old felt in new bones.
I shall be as a bluestar, so the old song goes.
From a seed sown in an oak grove.
I've grown flesh and bone, and returned to stone.
Reborn in a land that is not my home.
I long for the forest that i once roamed .
Oh my dear friends, where have you gone?
Closing my eyes i can hear the songs,
and see men speak words to call the storms.
I have seen our glory and our demise.
O has thou heard my cries through time?
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Re: Cries through time

Postby Naleena » 25 Oct 2011, 01:06

I liked your poem, Darach. Especially the way you phrased "I've grown flesh and bone, and returned to stone" and "wounds of old felt in new bones"
Sounds like you feel a bit out of your element. Are you drawn to another place?
The trees reach out as silent witnesses always willing to listen to your troubled heart. Nature offers her ears to anyone who speaks into the omnipotant silence. There are places that wait for you. You are loved....you are wanted....you are cared for. You are not alone.....you are not alone.....you have never been alone.
-DAS
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Re: Cries through time

Postby Darach » 25 Oct 2011, 07:08

Thank you Naleena, out of my element? yes....lol. Definitley drawn to another place as well , and thank you again for the kind words on my poem , almost didn't post it because it is more on the personal side..... Blessings
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Re: Cries through time

Postby Hairy Woman » 26 Oct 2011, 06:03

As someone living away from their home-country (and feeling the homesickness) I can very much relate to your poem, and to 'better times'. Am I correct in guessing that when you wrote this, you were feeling a sense of isolation?

'Oh my firends, where have you gone?
Closing my eyes I can hear the songs...'
--Although I try to thoroughly check my work, hilarious and non-sensical typos may result in longer posts due to a shoddy laptop keyboard--

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Re: Cries through time

Postby Darach » 26 Oct 2011, 06:36

Thank you Hairy Woman , i tend to ramble even when asked a simple question so i will try to keep this short..lol . To answer your question , i was really connecting with and remembering a certain time frame and event at the time and i had just started writing before i knew i was writing..lol and in writing those particular lines i was feeling many emotions and yes isolation was definitley felt for a time there..lol Blessings /I\
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Re: Cries through time

Postby Naleena » 26 Oct 2011, 22:22

Darach wrote:Thank you Naleena, out of my element? yes....lol. Definitley drawn to another place as well , and thank you again for the kind words on my poem , almost didn't post it because it is more on the personal side..... Blessings


It's the personal ones that are always the best :) I feel like you in a way. I long to be in the UK again. The first time I was in the Highlands of Scotland, I felt like I had returned home. BB
The trees reach out as silent witnesses always willing to listen to your troubled heart. Nature offers her ears to anyone who speaks into the omnipotant silence. There are places that wait for you. You are loved....you are wanted....you are cared for. You are not alone.....you are not alone.....you have never been alone.
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Re: Cries through time

Postby Darach » 26 Oct 2011, 22:51

I hear you there Naleena, the scottish highlands are definitley on my list of places to go . I used to read and I would put the movie Braveheart on in the background , just for the ambience....lol BB
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