Devas Dance

[Romelia]

Come sit and guard
the fire a while,
stars shimmer bright,
the tide wild.
Devas dance amongst the flames
shielding night
from thieves and wraiths;
igniting fevered dreams
fearless against the sea.

Dreams they pass
from eye to eye
and all the while
memories entwine;
a lovers spell
a lovers jest
a falling star
of nights bequest.
Enthralling sounds
of lapping waves
rouse the heart
and coax the flames.

Saline breeze caresses
flushed lustrous skin,
intoxicating
tormenting,
just
breathing the elixir in.

The moon swollen n whole,
smoulders
night moans a pleasure
Devas dance upon the pyre,
so come
and succumb
to the night time fires.

C.Blake 09

[Michael C. Page]

Very evocative. I like how you mix the rhythms (meter) in order to suddenly refocus the reader.

Thanks for posting this.

[Daryvas]

I agree with Michael about the effectiveness of the mixed meter. The meter and pacing feel like the uneven gales and gusts one might feel near the shore. Very nice.

[Huathe]

Aslaenoch, I was wondering where you had been? I have not seen you online in a little while.

[solarization]

A procession of images. Beauty, these words conjure.
Beautifully said, and paced, and made.
A sketch of mind, like charcoal
and chalk, on fire.
Beautiful
this is.

[wyeuro]

a very beautiful way with the words. the sounds make a whole other rhythm in counterpoint to the metric.

The moon swollen n whole,
smoulders
night moans a pleasure
Devas dance upon the pyre,
so come
and succumb
to the night time fires.

the word play is great, but the music of them is more. congratulations!
wy