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Samhain- looking for critique. Thank you in advance.

Postby Naleena » 05 Oct 2012, 07:53

Flames dance upon the fire
Leaves dance upon the wind
Sleeping beauty slumbers
As Samhain returns again

Moon with her silver slippers
Caresses each white crashing wave
As the tide returns to earth
And ancestors from their grave

They who are wise among us
Bear knowledge of the arcane
Who honor the door now open
When Samhain returns again
The trees reach out as silent witnesses always willing to listen to your troubled heart. Nature offers her ears to anyone who speaks into the omnipotant silence. There are places that wait for you. You are loved....you are wanted....you are cared for. You are not alone.....you are not alone.....you have never been alone.
-DAS
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Postby ebhadh » 05 Oct 2012, 22:37

Very good, Naleen. I think this is excellent.

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Postby Aphritha » 06 Oct 2012, 00:19

I agree, you do very well with words. :)
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Postby Naleena » 07 Oct 2012, 12:53

Thank you both for your time reading and for offering me your opinion. I appreciate it! :)
The trees reach out as silent witnesses always willing to listen to your troubled heart. Nature offers her ears to anyone who speaks into the omnipotant silence. There are places that wait for you. You are loved....you are wanted....you are cared for. You are not alone.....you are not alone.....you have never been alone.
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